Allegory of the Cave Sonnet
By Hayden Robel
Dark, like shadows, shifting, slinking in the dark.
Stygian shadows of men shackled, without thought.
Dark, like the fathomless depths, no light, no ark,
The shadows existed but yet did not.
Bright, it streamed into the cavern, not dark but light.
It didn’t matter, they didn’t care.
Bright, it illuminated their shackles, warm, white.
It didn’t matter, they ignored it, ignored the glare.
One, a zero, a shadow walked out, out from his shadows, into the day.
At first it hurt, the sun, lights brilliance blinding.
It wasn’t simple, the world, but he wanted to stay.
Some shadows came with him, others…the others, they didn’t think, didn’t care, comfortable in their binding.
To leave, to escape, to achieve enlightenment we must help each other.
To think we must learn how, to realize reality, to find ourselves, to leave the cave of our self-construction it takes one step, one person, one another.
You did a good job. I like how it was descriptive when you talked about the light on the shackles being warm and white. The rhyming was good for the sonnet. Good job :)
ReplyDeleteWow. This is great. I can tell that you put a lot of time and effort into this. You really went in depth into the desription of the allegory. good job!
ReplyDeleteReally great job! Your vocab was good and you followed the structure of a sonnet... Excellent!!
ReplyDeleteGreat job, I really like your rhymes and structure. Can you please comment on mine
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You did a great job with the information that you put in this sonnet. I just feel a lot of your pentameter structure is 11 syllables instead of 10. I don't know if you did it on purpose but if not I think it's easy to fix. Other then that great vocab and great sonnet! :D
ReplyDeleteGreat effort and conceptual imagery within this sonnet! Yet I do think that some sentences could use a slight revision due to an excess in the number of syllables, but that does not take away from the quality and skill within this sonnet.
ReplyDeleteHayden you always out due yourself! Your choice of words is phenomenal. Great job!
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GOSH!!! awesome vocab (of course) its awesome Hayden. out does mine.
ReplyDeleteGreat job!! Your sonnet is unique and it reflects on your personal writing skills. Great diction and good format.
ReplyDeleteGood job with this! I particularly liked the dark/bright repetition. It translates the initial confusion of "enlightenment" pretty well. In regards to the syllables, I agree that some of the later lines may have too many. Granted, I don't think it's a set-in-stone rule that sonnets HAVE to be in iambic pentameter, I got the impression that was just the norm. If you feel it would detract from the overall quality, I would leave it as it is.
ReplyDeleteAs always, your choice of words is always outstanding, and for some reason they all seem to fit together. I enjoyed this. Good job! The style also gets bonus points as well.
ReplyDeleteAmazing Sonnet Haden! It was a very unique way of approaching this and it made your sonnet one of the best ones out of our group. Good job
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DeleteWhooaaaaa! Really god job! Its structure is right on. Wonderful explanation of the allegory! :)
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ReplyDeleteI love how you emphasize on darkness in the first part and then the brightness on the other part, it was really creative and your structure is perfect! I agree with Lizbeth about your diction, it's always well chosen.
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ReplyDeleteThis is awesome!!! Great vocab and structure.
ReplyDeleteI like this part the best: " One, a zero, a shadow walked out, out from his shadows, into the day.
At first it hurt, the sun, lights brilliance blinding."...
I loved this. wow, you did a great job! I really liked how you worded everything and the tone was spectacular(:
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job Hayden. I really enjoyed your imagery.
ReplyDeleteProbably the best I have read thus far. Your diction is incredible and the imagery you create matches that of the allegory. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThe last line was a bit long but other than that it was pretty good.
ReplyDeletegreat job! i semi understoof it due to your large vocabulary eheh please comment on minee:)http://danig14.blogspot.com/
ReplyDeleteI liked the big words you chose and how they all made sense. You painted a vivid picture in my mind.
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as always amazing vocabulary in all your writing and could ya comment back on my sonnet
ReplyDeleteYou never fail to bring such great work. Awesome way of putting it!!
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